It's an exciting concept. I recommend re-reading for flow. You need more sentence variety too. Everything is very matter-of-fact: I did this. I did that. Add some artistic flair. It's called creative writing for a reason. Half of writing is telling a story. I think you have the story down. The other half is HOW you tell it. Intrigue the reader. Show off your writing skills, showcase your ability to spice up your writing. This has potential. Now make it special. Best of luck.

this starting is full of exciting and it's gripping. I hope more chapters.