great style, it's very intruiging and eye-appealing :)

okay, your style is starting to grow on me :)

love the ending; it's like this tiny sliver of hope that you're holding on to, even though you really believe that he *did* know. kinda the inverse of the summary for this, actually - you say "I don't expect you to catch me," but I feel like there is still that little piece of your heart that is still hoping that he will. or that, at least, he will pick you back up again.

alright, I will stop pretending like I know jack ish about you now haha :D

- Leila

love this! so much angst in a short, quick piece- I can totally relate :) amazing job!

Everything you write is so captivating and amazing. I'm envious~

Again, amazing job~

Wow... haha, I'm sitting here all depressed about something and I read your poem and I'm like, "Wow, that's me..." so GREAT job!

i love this.

Just amazing. I can always trust you to write such beautiful stuff.

"when the bruises on

my knees bear your

name "

That was something really...I don't know how to describe it. To me, the ending seemed as if he did know, but you wanted for him to pretend that he didn't, to make it hurt less. Just freaking brilliant. Keep up the writing!

It only takes a second to realize

the hurt someone's feeling.

Before they fall - hopefully he realizes

his need to catch her.

Felt the hurt in the poem -

keep it up )

Beautifully written...there's so much feeling in it, and your formatting really adds to that. I love the last bit...It's biting. Says something without having to really say it at all.

I like this, it's kinda new, I mean, people always wait for being caught, instead this is about falling as if nothing, the ending is ironic by the way.