Reviews for Unwanted Ritual
jillybean chapter 1 . 5/10/2011
I like the storyline but reading it was confusing at times. The flow of the story is interrupted by the use of words that would not be used in that context during a conversation in which you were describing this story to someone. ie: "we wrapped the wall" instead of "we turned the corner" and "the door was swung open inward" instead of "the door opened into the room". Is the exotic woman the main characters grandmother? this point is not clear.