Reviews for The Bully and The Brain
leavesfallingup chapter 12 . 3/22/2014
A good story, though the ending seemed a little abrupt. I would have like to see you develop the story more after the school shooting. Still, thanks for the fun read.
leavesfallingup chapter 10 . 3/22/2014
Good... you really had me worried after the last chapter. Which does beg the question: what do Pete and the father have planned? It does seem odd that Pete would change so much from the childhood friend who helped to this person who is willing to completely betray Patrick.
leavesfallingup chapter 9 . 3/22/2014
The story was believable thus far, but if the coroner ran a DNA test then he/she would have also easliy identified the remains of a fake cadaver. Hopefully this will become obvious in the next chapter? Otherwise your entire story (which was good thus far) falls apart.
Chauncey chapter 1 . 12/22/2010
You are a HORRIFIC writer. Not only are your characters without any real depth, your plot is meaningless, and your description of scene is on a fourth-grade level at best. The HUNKY PATCH? Really? That is the best name you could come up with? Books I was forced to read in middle school were considerably more challenging than this. You're a college student? Your literacy hasn't even surpassed middle school. You know, when I read something really stupid, it's like having a nail embedded in my brain-stem. This work however, feels like a wood screw, a very, very rusty wood screw. You have given me intellectual Tetanus.

Please, just stop.
PINKGAZER1990 chapter 12 . 12/20/2010
wow! i was not expecting for this to end so abruptely! but non the less was it an awesome read! most stories i read never have a true meaning behind it but yours was astonishing! i truly loved it! i wish there would have been more though! awesome job! keep it up!
CraziiFlop chapter 12 . 12/12/2010
Short but very sweet. I loved it. :)
OpenLocksWhoeverKnocks chapter 12 . 11/13/2010
ok i loved this story! you are an amazing writer!
XxRavenWolfxX chapter 12 . 11/13/2010
This was epic! I loved it! :)

Never read something like this before! Fresh stuff! :)
bridgettblah chapter 12 . 11/12/2010
O I love you. OMG that was so god! GAH! So cute! I was all like

O NOO PAT CANT DIE and then I was like

O happy ending! Hehe xD
SimplyLily94 chapter 12 . 11/12/2010
:D I LOVE IT! it was such a wonderful story!(: and it shows use that there is more to people then we think(: I SIMPLY ADORE YOUR STORY(: its wonderful.
bridgettblah chapter 11 . 11/12/2010
Nononononono he cant die...OMG
midnight to dusk chapter 10 . 11/12/2010
this story is so fantastically brilliant, though i want to know how her dad went from riches to rubble, and how he knew patrick's dad..
OpenLocksWhoeverKnocks chapter 10 . 11/9/2010
omg i love this story so much! so so so much! it is amazing! god dont ever stop writing because if you do i will hunt you down and yell at you until you agree to start writing again. you are amazing! man i wihs there was something more then favourites so i can add this story and you to it!
SimplyLily94 chapter 10 . 11/8/2010
:O I FREAKN LOVVE IT! hope you updatee soonn!(: this is my favorite story ever!
bridgettblah chapter 10 . 11/8/2010
Aw I must say, I REALLY like this! How many more chapters? Wow, I love this seriously its so cute! UGH! Your an amazing writer!
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