Reviews for Eli
YasuRan chapter 1 . 9/7/2010
To me, the piece felt incomplete. Like there could have been something more to tell but was omitted somewhere between the two stanzas. Eli as a person did not come across as particularly memorable, unfortunately.
HiddenFromYou chapter 1 . 9/3/2010
The two stanzas didn't seem that connected, almost as if you were talking about two completely different people. Now, this isn't automatically a bad thing, as you have been portraying two different sides of the same person. For example, the good vs. evil, the persona vs. the real person, etc?

The ending is very strong and sent a chill down my spine. Overall I think the second stanza holds more power than the first.