Reviews for Lies and Cries
YasuRan chapter 1 . 9/7/2010
I won't lie: you need to work on your spelling. It detracts from what is otherwise a decent poem. The subject matter is pretty hard-hitting but just suffers from not being conveyed in a better way.
sashawang chapter 1 . 9/5/2010
That's good!

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HiddenFromYou chapter 1 . 9/4/2010
I felt the most powerful part of this was the beginning:

"You've dishonored my families name

Replaced our pride with shame"

It sets the poem up in a good place with a decent hook. I have to say though, that it doesn't really follow on very well. In the rest of the poem there are several cliches and they detract from the power.

I didn't like the rhyming system. It seemed forced, as if you were trying to stick to a system and the emotion of the piece was suffering because of it.

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