|Reviews for Ballerinas in Seattle|
| Skyward Ending chapter 1 . 10/5/2010
I like the language you used. It flows well and there's a sense of loneliness, of a road meant to be taken alone, something that comes from being poor. I usually don't like structured poems because they end up sounding so incredibly cheesy, but the way you wrote yours makes it seem as original as if each line was new to its stanza; and yet, the way everything comes back to the beginning is beautiful-that first line! Very good as both start and ending. The one I have to criticize is the title. It is straightforward, and while this is something that most poets are wholly incapable of (and drives me mad) I'm not sure it works well in this setting. You have a beautiful poem here, and the title simply does not live up to it, and sometimes it's best to let the reader imagine where this is taking place.
| Ayx chapter 1 . 9/21/2010
Girls gossip, mimicking the women they've yet to dance into.
| lymli chapter 1 . 9/4/2010
aw, it's so elegant, I like how you picture the moves and faces that she puts.