Erm I don't know the story these characters are orginally from but this is just.. WOW! I loved it :)

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Yesh.

On a side note, the shorter and creepier my reviews are, the more my fangirl censors have gone up. This is an interesting typ e of lemon, very dirty, and it's nice to read something that's a bit more 'rough'!

I really liked this chapter. I think the way you capture Estelle's emotions about Heather is really good. Not sure why Heather is giggling at first though - surely if Kuroshi is coming after she should either be scared all the way through or be more appreciative when he catches her?

As for the interaction between Chris and Estelle after Kuroshi catches Heather, I love the way Chris and Estelle actually talk as well as having sex because in the full book there was less talking between the two and it seemed the relationship was totally physical. Ok, here they are talking about sex... but you can't have everything. It's nice that they interact on a level that isn't just physical.

On the whole a brilliant chapter (again).

i like it it did throw me off a bit when they could take off their own clothes and stuff and i lied the little heather kuro thing because that is what "inspired" them lol

It was intriguing! And I reviewed, like I said I would. . bur you really did a good job!

WOW Yay! I'm so happy this was posted! I really couldn't help but think "Oh Estelle you catch on quick

This should have way more than 7 reviews.

I love Chris and Estelle, they're a very interesting pair. ;)

Great "spinoff," loved it!

Hearts!

-Katie

WHAT IS THIS? THIS IS FREAKIN AMAZING THATS WHAT!

How come you can write amazing scenes like this but you didnt put them in your other story! please please say you will!

this is beautiful. I cant stand reading stories that refer to the characters bodies in such a degrading way. The way you do it is like art. it takes my breath away. Estelle is so beautiful. He is like a fluttering angel. And chris is SO human! He's in love but so unsure. He's gentle with Estelle because estelle is smaller and naive. Just. i cant even explain it. everything is flawless. its amazing.

this couple reminds me of Natsu and Hiromu from Lolita Moon. I feel like this is a little peak into the way they would be if they ever became true lovers.

Its so gorgeous i hope they get together.

Thanks for writing this! i have to go see the story you mentioned in it too! if its this good i cant wait!

PS. this was also very hot. please write more hot stuff. thanks!

YES!

This was a sweet story, and much better than others I've read. Many don't use such-how can I put this?-creative terms for the male anatomy. If only more slash writers wrote like you did.

im with kenny super hot and heavy 3 but i alreayd cleaned up, jk XD!

I have to clean up now. O-o that was hot xD

Now I know what really happened! I really like the use of all the flowery language while you described what was going on. Thank you again for writing this chapter since I requested it. Now I REALLY know what happened in that chapter! )

Phenomenal. This flowed so well. I want it on my page so badly but the little kids would be shocked! lol! They'd say "Mommy what's Chris doing to Estelle?" "I am 12 and what is this?" XD

Anyway, I love the way this turned out. I almost died of embarrassment just reading it. Talk about hot and heavy!