Reviews for Paralyzer
Maia the Writer chapter 1 . 9/6/2019
This was such a fun one shot to read! I like all the characters and how as the reader, you able to learn about them even if they only spoke a few sentences.
HeadOverHeelsInHate chapter 1 . 2/24/2013
Awww! Cute! Awesome!
newone chapter 1 . 11/6/2012
when the story said sway buble version i nearly passed out with excitement love the song and then when they debated tango or salsa loved the guy. i wanted to say y'all don't know nothing bout that (Houston, texas baby)
mydreamadventure chapter 1 . 9/26/2012
hahaha loved this it was quite cute :)
theKnobblyKneedWriter chapter 1 . 4/24/2012
Oh my gawd, that was brilliant. chapter 1 . 1/24/2012
I loved this, but my main thought throughout the story was how funny that religion often tears apart loves when it's what's supposed to bring people closer together.

Your writing is impeccable, I've been reading your oneshots and yeah. Amazing. :) I just think that your endings come off a bit abruptly. It's like you want to create a snapshot, but delve too deep into it in the beginning, and then come back to the snapshot in the end - if you get what I'm trying to say.

Some of it just goes too deep for it to be a simple snapshot, but the ending ends as one, which is in the end a bit mismatched to the rest.

It's not a problem in this particular story, but In your Arms especially. And then Fall was a bit like that.

But I absolutely love your stories. Thank you for sharing.

Love it.
Ceri Anne chapter 1 . 11/8/2011
This had me grinning like an idiot! I loved it!
Eunoia chapter 1 . 10/18/2011
That was delightful! didn't give the name of the artist for the song Paralyzer though. So I listened to Finger Eleven's just to get a feel of the story. At some point it fit. LOL. But I'd appreciate it if you could provide the artist for the song just for reference or whatever.

Again, great job. :)

BTW, I heart Crazy Love. :)))))
frouwe chapter 1 . 5/8/2011
It was surprising that she'd never been kissed before that. The shorter guy comment from earlier made me think she had some experience. Not like a slut, but at least a bit.

Other than that... well, I'm just a sucker for everything resembling a cliché.
you're-my-shooting-star chapter 1 . 4/18/2011
Aww :) That was cute. I loved it.
InnocentSarcasm chapter 1 . 4/18/2011


ahem on a not so cranial note I loved it so cute and aw he was her first kiss too sweet
WishBlade chapter 1 . 11/16/2010
Adorable yet humorous! This was amazing ]
silverofsun chapter 1 . 9/7/2010
The Imagination Addict chapter 1 . 9/7/2010
hey! luv ur story! sry no time to pinpoint grammar but its pretty gd. i like the first kiss bit; unusual. on the whole, english is gd. maybe juz one part im nt sure abt: "he shook his head, mouth cracked, (to my delight), hair askew." is she delighted abt the mouth or hair bit? if mouth, you should remove the comma in front of the brackets. btw, it's "mouth cracked open". probably a careless error on ur part.
watercolour dreams chapter 1 . 9/7/2010
That was really cool. You're such a good writer! I love Jackie as a character. She's so funny and witty. She has a lot of spunk. It's very entertaining.

Honestly, I don't know what else I can say. This was absolutely awesome! I love all the characters - especially Jackie - the plot, your writing, everything. There are so many parts to it that are awesome that if I told you all of them, I would run out of review space. Anyway, this was fantastic and very realistic. It's nice that there were no big "I love you" admitions - that it was just like a re-uniting from High School with CLEAR chemistry. It is fantastic.

You are a great writer! Keep up the good work :)