|Reviews for Scorched Mind|
| Who Is This Girl Anyway chapter 1 . 8/29/2011
The detail of this piece is stunning- it's so easy to visualise a clear, distinct picture. The misery the poor man is facing is obvious, and despite saying nothing and not being given his own voice, he is easy to sympathise with.
The only thing that I could think of for you to improve is to perhaps give the reader a few more clues to what has happened to the man's loved ones, as the piece leaves a few questions. Having said that, that makes the reader dwell on the piece for longer, so would that count as a flaw? Hmm. I'm not sure.
Anyway, good work.
| Whirlymerle chapter 1 . 12/20/2010
Your use of imagery is excellent, I could really picture the scene. I hope you got a good great on it. :)