Reviews for untitled
Sito chapter 1 . 8/28/2014
Short, beautiful, emotion-evoking and captured perfectly.
Khuber chapter 1 . 8/10/2014
This was beautiful. The ending line, I loved. How you incorporated earthquakes to make it more vivid. Great job!
punctured.lungs chapter 1 . 8/22/2011
incredible. it can be taken to mean so many different things... i love it.
Domina chapter 1 . 1/19/2011
This one's my favorite :)
thursdays and rain chapter 1 . 11/2/2010
definitely a fav -
CuriousContradiction chapter 1 . 10/16/2010
this reminded me of ernest hemingway's flash fiction "for sale: baby shoes, never worn" in that it's short but evokes so much emotion. i can't quite put my finger on what it is exactly, but there's just something in the way you combined earthquakes with the world ending and your heart breaking (that's how it really feels, doesn't it?). and at first, i thought the soundtrack line was surprising, but now it seems to fit.

beautiful. you've made me feel so much with just a few words.
Little girl Big world chapter 1 . 10/3/2010
"and fading away.

(like the end of a soundtrack)"

What a great way to end this.

I like the shortness of this piece, I just think it adds to it, though I couldn't say how. Anyway, wonderfully written.
Inkspilled chapter 1 . 10/1/2010
I loved the ending. It gave such a clear, crisp feel to it that you could relate to. Short and sweet, it tells a bigger story with fewer words. Great work.
Ayo'zaVampire chapter 1 . 10/1/2010
Am so in love with this poem.

Printed it out

curled up in bed with it

...and cried like a baby
NearlyPrescient chapter 1 . 9/21/2010
short, but the imagery is powerful enough that it has quite an effect. great work
Kariktan chapter 1 . 9/20/2010
Even if it's short is wonderful and amazing!