Reviews for The Fairy Summoning
solner chapter 2 . 10/3/2011
I am curious about a few things. Namely if Lilith has a lilith inside her, because that is the feeling I'm getting from the whole wind and temporary change in attitude. The mind link is an intresting concept, with a lot of risks but cool effects overall. Now I am sorry if this is weird, but the part when Lilith calls Frey pretty a really funny picture popped into my head of him as a "man-lady".

I know this isn't really a review, but I ought to leave my thoughts. As for the writing, I think the same as time, and this is a good follow up of the introduction of Frey and also gives a lot of mystery to the story like who is Theo, what is inside Lilith, and how will this test go.

I am definitely looking forward to the next chapter.
solner chapter 1 . 10/3/2011
Ok, first I can say you have a very good writing style. It didn't take much reading for me to start to visualize the room Frey was in. Also, your ability to acurately portray someone's personality is very good and makes it really easy to sympathize with the character. I like how near the end he has to rationalize it in his head that he is doing the right thing.

All in all, I can say that I shall be reading this story, and someone on your level of writing is rare, and you should definitely continue on. The beginning is much too good to not have an end.
Ramar chapter 2 . 3/22/2011
O...this sounds very interesting...will you update this soon?
Kairi Nightingale chapter 2 . 2/1/2011
Wow, I really like where this story is going. :) You used a bunch of hints and foreshadowing in this chapter that has me really anxious to see what happens next.

How old are Lilith and Frey, by the way?

How you made them think and act made me curious about how old they were.
Kairi Nightingale chapter 1 . 2/1/2011
Wow, I love how you wrote this story so far! It's really good. I can really relate to Frey and his thoughts on studying. I also thought it was funny that fairies can apparently get drunk on soda. :D

Anyway, I found no mistakes so great job! I'm looking forward to reading more.
ShortcakeMattie chapter 2 . 1/26/2011
“Dainty, with sharp umber eyes” maybe you meant amber?

I like the interaction between Lilith and Frey, especially when she calls him cute. Her reaction to waking up in the other realm as being in a dream was believable.

“Mr. Fairy was too disgusting a name to ever repeat.” - Best. Line. Ever.

I can’t wait to see where this story goes!
ShortcakeMattie chapter 1 . 1/26/2011
I have a friend that goes to school where the initials are F.I.T. which made me laugh, because I don’t think he’s going to school to be a fairy XD I liked the concept of your story, about a fairy only receiving wings once they graduated. Frey is believable and I can easily imagine him studying and his head getting ready to explode. I want to know more about his friend, Wen, and his parents, especially his relationship with his father. I liked the sarcasm and humor thrown in. The scene flowed nicely and I liked how you paid attention to the little details (rickety old desk, coiled parchment, feathered hat charmed to inspire him…)
Anon chapter 2 . 10/11/2010
I love Lilith and Frey's characters but the story's moving a little slow. Shouldn't more happen? Sorta felt like it wasn't a full chapter.
Katie Runyon chapter 2 . 10/9/2010
"Is that a real wand? Like from Tinkerbell? Oh geez!" -hehe

This one was even better than the last. Now we are getting deeper into the story. I love Lilith's innocence. The bit where things haven't gone the same as they have before and Lilith seemed to change for a bit is nice and mysterious. Since they are so different, I can see things will be interesting between them to say the least! And you show those differences well. It seems Frey may be in a little over his head though. It was a good ending and I can't wait to read more!
Katie Runyon chapter 1 . 10/9/2010
I like how you have studying being something that could kill you!

"The Human Connection: A Study of Human Society," Frey read, much repulsed. "Bleh." -love this line! Especially the end. :)

There could never have been a greater waste of time than making a study out of something so absurd as a species that would invent that ridiculous carbonated drink. Soh-da, was it? -Another good one!

Then twenty joined in a chorus of persistent birds, alerting Frey of the rising sun. -The first part of this sentence seems a little off. maybe something like "Then twenty more joined into create a chorus or persistent birds," or some such. That example is probably horrible, but hopefully it helps to understand what I mean.

Then twenty joined in a chorus of persistent birds, alerting Frey of the rising sun. -Like this bit too!

I love how he thinks of a human as an "it".

Really good. A lot of fun parts and a nice dramatic touch at the end. Seems like an interesting story!
Raebie chapter 2 . 10/8/2010
Another good chapter! You did really well with Lilith's character. Can't wait to see where it goes.
Raebie chapter 1 . 10/2/2010
I love the idea of a fairy studying about humans. And the fact that you ended with a small cliffhanger. Can't wait to see what happens next.

Also, if you could read and review my story, "Scattered Hope", I would be exceedingly grateful. :)
ScribblesOnPaper chapter 2 . 9/24/2010
An interesting chapter with more details on their appearances this time. An expository piece that rides on the previous chapter. The shift in Frey's speech, and the indications of his dislike for humans were golden. Frey's presence in the narrative is very strong
thenutrunningthenuthouse chapter 1 . 9/23/2010
I can honestly say I've never seen this kind of story before. Fantasy isn't my genre, so I can only give you as unbiased of a review as I can. Right away, I like how Frey isn't a perfect student and that he struggles with his studies, just like any normal person...fairy. I like the idea of having fairies go to school and have to learn about humans. Are these sort of fairy godparents or something else? Good job ending the chapter with a sort of cliffhanger; keeps the readers reading.

I don't think I have any critique to give. It comes off as a lighthearted start to a fantasy tale, and I don't see anything to change. Great job.

For the exchange, in order to save you a trip back to checking which story I want, I'd really appreciate a review on my story, "Narcotia's Eyes." Thank you in advance. :)
Sierra chapter 2 . 9/22/2010
Is this chapter 1 again? :O I was really excited when I saw the update but it turned out to be the same thing! Go write the next part before I take out my whip! ;D
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