Hi!

You asked me awhile ago to check your stuff out, and I forgot until now. Sorry!

This is written very well. There are a few lines that don't fit (just my opinion), like this one: " I…I can't die maybe; just maybe he had an ounce one ounce of sympathy! But, no. I will not beg I have to stay strong to the very end!"

But your descriptions are good, I really felt the fear when I read "The man's soft, creepy voice penetrated the silence."

You should keep writing, regardless of reviews. Writing should be about writing, not... reviews :) I know how it feels to work really hard and not get any feedback, but don't let it stop you! Your style is good, so keep at it.

Oh, murder mystery. Always fun. It's always fun to see who did it and why.