|Reviews for artemis et actaeon|
| Slaaty chapter 1 . 10/25/2010
What a cryptic piece! I loved it; the imagery, the descriptions, the line "spied spying"... My only suggestion would be in this stanza:
"she (for whilst I was caught in rapturous amore,
the sexless voluptuousness became softly effeminate)"
It's a great description, and a great use of vocabulary, but I think there were just too many syllables present. When I read, I'll say the words internally in my head, and when I reached that stanza, I lost my rhythm.
...but that's just me being overly picky. Great work - thanks for writing this!