Wow just.. wow. this entire thing, gave me tingles. I love it.

Wow. For such a short thing, there are a lot of good things in this first one. The first line is brilliant.

"...undesired object of your desire." Wow; good, good, good. Irony at is best; almost like a paradox.

I loved the change of 'would' for 'could' on the last two lines; the small change of the repetion makes the ending just amazing and gives a lot of insight into the main character of the poem.

Good. Really good.