Reviews for Tales of Talmarin
xxxyx chapter 4 . 12/4/2013
Interesting... now I get the direction of the story. Gah, I curse myself for not guessing the obvious. Sacrifice! Lol.
Of course the talk with the old man revealed to him that these visitors shouldn't be allowed to witness their little secret...
And 'action' is going to be taken, under the name of religion, I see...
'...We pick em random-like, an' all understan' wha' they be dyin fer. An' we ain't ne'r forget their sacrifice. Can your Church say as much for those who have died in its name?' - lol, I love this paragraph, especially the last line. Thought provoking.
And I knew it was Vlad from the start, but still an enjoyable and well done climax. Fight a cult with zombies, ha, the irony. XD A cleric saved from devil worshippers by a necromancer.
'She didn't [dare] to look down at the bloody mess she knew was at her feet.' - typo.
'You were about to let them sacrifice you so that you could try [save?] them by example.' - typo? Btw, good guess, Vlad. :P
I like how you present all the moral arguments, both for and against the Church.
It's a fun philosophical journey, without taking away the badassery.
Although the part with the author's note: I tend to believe that the Middle Ages was a dark age when the Church misused its powers various times, so the Church of the Five had more sound morals than the Middle Age church imo.
But so far, it's still my favorite from this series, with the first story, of Roland and Vlad versus the Boggart being a close second.
xxxyx chapter 3 . 12/4/2013
Hm, starts with a philosophical discussion.
So overall, the theme touches on the idea of religion and what is deemed as evil. And what people do in the name of religion, with fantasy examples.
Enjoyed the read, so far. I found myself asking, as I got nearer the page end, 'So, this is just a tale centered on religious actions?' but then I saw the 'Continued in Part 2,' and was glad. I wonder what surprises lay in store.
As usual, prose being your strong point, a believable cast of characters, and all...
Will read more sooner or later to pass down better judgement on this particular tale. ;) (currently slightly busified)
xxxyx chapter 2 . 11/12/2013
Hm, were you aiming for... every episode to be like... a weekly show, monster-of-the-week style? You have the potential to be one of the most successful one in that style that I've read in FP.
Hm, Warcraft-like races...
Bar brawl hurray!
Ah, interesting. I just realised halfway to the story, that this story has a different protagonist. Either I'm really, really slow, or it was not that obvious in the beginning. I guess it's the first.
It feels much shorter than the last chapter. Less action, but the writing style, from Crimson's POV, compensates for that. I'd complain if the writing is not this... level.
Pfft. The nation of Purr...
Ah, seeing your detailed descriptions, you are no stranger to writing fantasy. And you organize your interuniverse facts.
Al Muharib empire... I know enough Arabic to know what Al Muharib means, you... :P Making things sound so similar to Arabic reminds me to Frank Herbert's Dune.
Anyway, how's the novel going? o wo
xxxyx chapter 1 . 11/7/2013
Hm, writing medieval fantasy is always a good exercise. Anyway, I skipped Yonmahou, seeing how it was the older version of an already rewritten story.

Welp, quite a mouthful of names.

Ah, 'inherited spook'. As usual, a rich narrative, requires a little bit of effort to digest though, but having the refined feel, making it enjoyable.

'...for almost a full minute.' - lol.

'Not until three months ago when [he] bought that cursed wardrobe.' - eh, sorry. Couldn't help myself.

'Izza buggert.' - lol

'Stripped of all disguises, the fiend was like...' - yummy description you have there. Very graphic. It's beautiful! *wipes away a tear* And, oh yeah, '[A] mask half like a skull and half like the face of an evil...'

'...teeth of all descriptions...' - lol, love this phrase.

Anyway, this one chapter is already quite a ride, it could stand as a one shot, the mystery, the action, the lovely characters, the high-strung narrative... I enjoyed it. It reminds me of a (very) well-written RAOSC Tourney piece.
Rabukurafuto chapter 12 . 9/9/2011
It gets stranger. I wonder what shall happen next?
Rabukurafuto chapter 11 . 8/23/2011
I think that I liked Callista saying that it is not a good thing to only live for making things the way they once were. More people need to understand that.

What I fail to understand though is why Tagerus did not immediately give the new of the letter from Tyrion. I would imagine he would be eager to spread that news. He does not act like he saw something to be suspicious of like Callista did. He was overly hopeful of it. Tyrion's actual appearance was quite good though. I look forward to seeing how that turns out.
Rabukurafuto chapter 10 . 8/17/2011
I liked this one much better. Now I understand what is going on in the earlier chapter. The context is very welcome. Even though this one was short too, it really fleshed out Tagerus and his situation. It is easy to feel sorry for him when his father will only recognize the eldest child as heir, even if said eldest child betrayed them and is currently missing. I also love the use of the word Condottiere. Good work.
Jax Creation chapter 1 . 8/10/2011
I really enjoyed this. The dynamic between Vlad and Roland was very entertaining and it was great to see typical fantasy classes put into play. I can really this being part of a manga series. The story itself was well-written; there were a couple of missing words that escaped proofreading but it's not a big issue. I look forward to reading more! _

Jax C.
Rabukurafuto chapter 9 . 8/7/2011
I think that was too short. There was little context for me to make sense of anything.
Takahashi Kurou chapter 1 . 6/29/2011
I am glad you got back into this, and seem to be doing quite well. I comment here on chapter one because I simply clicked, but would like to narrate this for as far as the story has gone. Precisely 8 Chapters so far. It's quite interesting, for I am a fan of the Fantasy Classes types like Mages, Warriors, Knights, Monks or even Archers, Wizards, or Druids.

Have fun with this, we'll cheer you on. Thanks

Takahashi
Rabukurafuto chapter 8 . 6/22/2011
Yes, these are interesting characters, and I do think they deserve more to be written about them. They would be helped by having longer stories.
Rabukurafuto chapter 7 . 6/22/2011
This was an interesting chapter, but I found it difficult to tell who was talking at times, especially with names coming late into the chapter.
Rabukurafuto chapter 6 . 6/2/2011
This was an unusual revelation, having Lilith and Mimi actually be separate personalities attached to Terra. That would make things difficult to write. It is an intriguing idea though, and it can certainly benefit Terra if each has her own supply of magic. Thank you for the quick update. I look forward to more of Terra.
Rabukurafuto chapter 5 . 6/1/2011
This was rather interesting. Yet again the story switches to some new characters. Be careful about adding so many it becomes confusing. A character page might be needed in that case.

It seems like this group is in a very interesting situation, but not much was explained about them. I hope more is revealed during the next chapter. It is all very mysterious.

I pictured Terra, Lilith, and Mimi as Lina, Naga, and Amelia. Lilith seems to dislike golems though, so I doubt the resemblance was too intentional.
The Red Raven chapter 1 . 6/1/2011
Love it!
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