|Reviews for martyr your insecurities and play by the rules|
| JHeartbreak chapter 1 . 3/13/2012
I like this story. It has a sharpness of observation that I like, that I’d like to see more of. The characters are distinct and vivid (well, Cody anyways) and the developments of the plot work well. I think this is an example of what I was talking about earlier, about the embodiment and the sense of vividness. You go further here than in other stories to place us sensually in the scene, and it works. It makes the reversal at the end more poignant and the story more enjoyable throughout.
| Nute chapter 1 . 10/7/2010
HOLY SHIT THIS RELATIONSHIP IS SO AMAZING. I LOVE IT. I LOVE IT SO MUCH. IT'S SO DIFFERENT THAN ALL THE OTHER ONES YOU'VE WRITTEN AND OMFG TOTAL LOVE FOR THIS.
BU THAR TYPO.
"I have no idea what you're talking about." I stared at Dalton and tried to cloud the image of Cody smirking at me with a cigarette sticking out of his lips. I didn't succeed.
(BUT HE DIDN'T KNOW CODY'S NAME YET.)
BUT OTHER THAN THAT HOLY EFFING SHIZ MAN THIS IS DEFINITELY ONE OF MY FAVOURITES.
| big.break.and.laryngitis chapter 1 . 10/5/2010
this was cute. that's really all. it was good, cute, happy-making. i like :)
| yabureta tsubasa chapter 1 . 10/5/2010
Once again, your attention to detail takes your humor from the ordinary to the brilliant. The line about Cody's birthday and his allergy to shrimp was priceless. Those same details (like "until I remembered there was no light") also serve to really highlight those important romantic moments (which totally make me go "aw"). :P
I would still suggest a beta reader... Little typos and omitted words (and strange word substitutions... "I best to myself that Cody..." ?) jump out here and there and take me out of the story.
So adorable. :)
| Silloutted Shadow chapter 1 . 10/5/2010
A little more details would be nice but otherwise it was a really good chapter.