Reviews for Twenty Four Pills
TrajectoryToNoWhere chapter 1 . 1/12/2011
Normally I hate poems like these; however, I rather like this one a lot, especially leading up to "crystal meth". Powerful.
Rosetta Penn chapter 1 . 12/15/2010
Rhyming!

Is it weird that this made me smile?
Little girl Big world chapter 1 . 10/13/2010
I admire and envy your rhyming skill.

This is brilliantly crafted!
cab fed hig chapter 1 . 10/6/2010
great rhymes, completely tragic
Mandisaurus-rex chapter 1 . 10/6/2010
It's almost like you've created two voices here...

One's saying, "do itt!"

And the other is saying, "Do it faster!"

And the first voice is talking throughout most of the poem, but the second voice comes in for the last two lines to put in its own two cents. I really like that :). It's really well done! :)

Mandie
UnicornSlayer chapter 1 . 10/6/2010
This poem is beautiful, and the number one reason (for me anyways) is that its unique and you can tell it came only from you and your heart, thats what makes any writting great. This puts so much imagery in my head and yet its so simple. You did a very good job with the flow of this poem. Keep writting :)
noctema chapter 1 . 10/6/2010
i love every word of this.

never stop writing.