Beautifuly written, though a tad confusing in parts. please continue!

Hi!

Wow... okay, I so lied. It ended up being family night. On with the review:

So, I totally don't get where this is going (yet) but I'm ignoring that in favor of your epic writing and delicious characters. I think the first chapter, and these last two were actually pretty informative and fore-shadow-y. And then, the middle two were nice and steamy. (Though I have to wonder at the pass-out after-effects...)

I'm way hyped up and LOVE reading your writing style. It's almost like a chameleon, turning to different shapes but retaining its flavor (don't ask me how that is a chameleon, since they change colors.)

Besides that, your characters (and their pretty interactions!) are really facsinating!

Please continue,

Bye!

Man, why don't these things ever turn out how they're supposed to?

That last line there? That was the first thing I ever came up with. That's where I started with this story. It was AWESOME.

...and now it's not.

Son of a chicken.

This damn chapter was SO HARD TO TIE IN YOU HAVE NO IDEA

:dies:

OH

OH JOY

I'M AN IDIOT

Hi!

HI!

WOW. Your writing it astounds me and... I'm so in love... and... and...and... *cries with the beauty of it all*

Really, your writing... I've fallen in love! (I'm a fickle lover by nature though... er, kinda). It's so... I don't know but it leads my mind around on fantastical circles of delight and ardour... And this is only your nature of writing. I haven't even mentioned your characters!

There isn't much of them right now, and it may take a bit longer but you show exactly how much actions actually influence readers' thoughts of a character. This is already a rich tapestry of swirling colors and rich burgandy threads of characters.

Mikhail, Skarse, Sergei... Yuri (I don't know how I feel about him) they're all amazing!

I really can't wait for more of this, it's just fantastic!

Please continue your amazingness!

Bye!

ARGLEBARGLE

THIS THING FRIES MY BRAIN

that is all