|Reviews for learned one|
| writemystorywithoutink chapter 1 . 6/29/2011
not sure if I understand this fully, but it definitely has got me thinking of and imagining the scene. I like how it hits home, but in a vague way. I don't know what the applications are for, or any of the circumstances of why he ran off with smoke filled lungs, but these tiny details were enough to create some images in my mind. very simple and powerful writing, good job.
| RentBoheme chapter 1 . 10/23/2010
Whoa. The language in your poetry just feels so raw and it flows so well and - I don't know what to say, but really well done. The last two lines were awesome.