Reviews for Kaiser University |
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![]() ![]() ![]() :,( why will? why would he pretend to want to go out with her but in the end he cared so little he tried to kill her? |
![]() ![]() ![]() just reading this over, i miss this story |
![]() ![]() woah...i dont think theres anything else for me to say... ...too good for words... ... |
![]() ![]() ![]() 'Why did you kiss me back?' ~ lol. Smartass answer. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Somehow I think that Chase already knew that Talia is somesort of his mate. W all this coincidance. ;) I reread your story again. is mate. W all this coincidance. ;) I reread your story again. |
![]() ![]() I just have to say, I just finished reading this through for the THIRD time. Your way of writing grabs me instantly and I feel as it I'm right there! Keep up the amazing work! |
![]() ![]() I was sceptical at first, seeing as how there have been a ridiculous amount of vampire stories published ever since the Twilight books came out. However, I happen to like the Twilight series a lot, so I can't help myself when I see another vampire book on the shelves, though I have been disappointed by their contents several times over. Your story is the first one I've read from , and I have found myself pleasantly surprised. Your story has a "hook" to it that I enjoy, and I'm a sucker for love stories. I couldn't stop reading. No really, you had me hooked from chapter one to the end, I barely took time off to eat o_O Suffice to say, I loved it, and I feel obliged to give you feedback after experiencing your gift to us readers. Although a vampire academy is perhaps a bit overused in books, your twist with the other two houses was most interesting. I really would have liked more information on the other two houses, as well as more interactions between them and Talia. Don't get me wrong though, I understand that Talia couldn't get that much social time in with them since all she really had were a couple of breakfasts with a select group, but I am desperately interested in knowing more about the other students, what powers they have and if they include Talia in their family as much as you suggested. I also want to know their house symbols. I understood that the vampire house's symbol was a pheonix, so what about the other houses? Does the university have its own badge(I suppose I'm thinking of a Hogwarts badge now)? The fact that the academy is a castle is also somewhat predictable, but honestly, I wouldn't want a vampire academy to be anywhere other than in an impressive castle, so that's settled. The fact that it is in Germany is also something totally new, which I like. If I could give you a tip though, it seems like all of the students have no problems with English, which kind of suggests that they are all either British or American (Canadian/Australian...etc.). From what I understand this university is one of a kind, so it would have an international atmosphere too even if the official language is english, wouldn't it? The castle itself also requires more detail. I have an active imagination as is, but I just kind of ended up making your castle look like Hogwarts. I would suggest you describe it in more detail, both the outside and the insides (Especially the rooms Talia spends a lot of time in: the hallways, the classrooms [auditoriom like? Or straight rows of desks? that kind of thing] the rec room and the common room) I really want to know more about the kind of environment they are in, help me fill in the blanks as a reader so that I can imagine a place for your characters that doesn't rip off from other stories I have read. I found it extremely interesting that you decided to set your vampire school in a university, as most vampire stories go for high school. I like that. But it raises the question, if the victim was turned as a 6 year old child, would they still go there? I mean newly turned vamps, since you can be 2,0 years old and still look like a gorgeous 20 year-old (Chase _). Although I enjoyed the beginning of your story very much (it raised my heart rate and instantly made me sympathize with Talia), I found her acceptance of vampires a bit off, she accepted it so easily. And even though Chase threatened her to near death, I would have liked to at least have seen one or two escape attempts. However, I loved it when she annoyed the hell out of him. It made my heart stop for her when Chase showed how much power he had over her. Eliciting that kind of reaction from me, as a reader, means that the story is very well written, because I can imagine it happening. The way you had their relationship progress from oppressor and victim to tentative love for one another satisfied me immensely, since I mentioned I'm a sucker for love stories. However, I can't help but feel that Chase has too much power over her, I'd love to see her level the playing field; though your writing to me suggests that you already have something in motion for us. I hope my criticism hasn't bored you to death, and that maybe you will consider some of my suggestions the next time you write, either for this story or whatever new one you're working on. Please know that your story made my day, and that I was heart broken when I reached the last chapter. I saw at the end that there is more to come. You now have one more fan breathlessly waiting to see how you will conclude your work on Kaiser University. Good luck! |
![]() ![]() I'd love to congradulate you, i stopped reading for a while after this chapter and realised that i hadn't thought of the word 'twilight' for the past couple of chaptrs. before twilight got famous, i loved reading vampire stories online, then it came out and i cant help but make connections, intentional or not, and that depressed me :( kep it up !-b |
![]() ![]() ![]() Aw, I really liked Amber. She had loved Will and he in turn had killed her. It's sort of tragic and so sad to see that happen, although with everything happening, the best way is to just move forward. Great story. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Wow. That was intense although I'm not quite sure how Talia had pieced it all together. It's slightly a blur and everything happened so fast, it was so unreal. Great work. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Aw. I love how this is growing, it's great to see the relationship between Chase and Talia grow and prosper from hate to a seldom love. It's cute and especially with all that happened, you can see where the loyalties lie. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Huh. That was quite surprising, it's slightly complicated with everything but I can really feel the always there fear that Talia has now living with vampires. Nice chapter. |
![]() ![]() ![]() It's sort of a bit much on Talia's part with everything that's suddenly happening. I can't really imagine how she's feeling with it all as it slowly sinks in. She seems so apathetic with her parents and their melodramatics that it seems a little off to me, but it's most likely because of the fact that she's used to it and so tunes it out. I like how you get to know the character as the chapter goes on. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Wow. That was quite amazing and very descriptive. i could really feel the adrenaline and fear, it made me gasp and breath in short breaths as I read through the very suspenseful parts. It's very intriguing and quite well written too. |
![]() ![]() I'm so glad I found one of thee best on Booksie on here! Glad to see you're alredy havin reviews on both these amazing stories! Simply cant wait for the much awaited third 'book' to this awesometastic series! ;)) O, i feel bad to say. Is it ok to put a mini 'recap' of both stories in the begining of the third? *u_u* Sorry, it's been a while since I've read the stories! You don't have to...nvm |