Reviews for Pack
Tomoe Kawaji chapter 5 . 2/4/2011
I recommend getting a beta reader. Or, at least, someone to check for grammar/spelling errors. For example, you used: He said his deep voice vibrating... (There's gotta be a comma between "said" and "his." I know it's something small, but you make such errors a lot, and they've been nagging at me)

It's an interesting story, and I like the build-up you have going on here. Unfortunately, the beginning goes along a little too quickly, with rushed explanations that feel forced and tacked-in. It'd be great if you stabilized the first two chapters a little more.

By the way, polyamory isn't as original as you may think; just because someone else may have such plots does not mean he or she is copying you in any way. I know there's a lot of Ouran Host Club fanfiction out there that pairs up one female character with six or seven males (HaruhixHost Club, for instance)

It's very considerate how you put the author's note in with the chapter; I barely find that these days, and indeed it's hiss-worthy to find a story has updated only to find it's an author's note for a chapter. Thumbs-up there.

Looking forward to updates.
violet-eyez chapter 4 . 2/3/2011
FlowerGirl7 chapter 4 . 1/16/2011
ohh are u gonna update soon its january all ready ha ha plez i really want u to carry on i need to knw what happens! please update X :)

P.S NO pressure he he
NicerTwin chapter 3 . 12/27/2010
love it! please update! I find it so unrealistic how the guys are all CEO of some major ass company, yet it doesnt ever occur to the public that their bosses are always missing?
HeartStringsAttached chapter 4 . 12/22/2010
Hurry up with the next chapter please! I actually really like the whole, "group love" thing. It's interesting and different. I like how the males are starting to get more possessive too.
TheLovelessRose chapter 2 . 12/17/2010
ehehhe i like the sound of that (the last paragraph) .
TheLovelessRose chapter 1 . 12/17/2010
Oh sounds interesting. Keep it up .
aniH120 chapter 4 . 12/12/2010
I. LOVE. THIS. STORY! its unique and funny! i can't wait 4 the next update. im keeping my fingers crossed that you'll hve the time to update!
KMx0x chapter 4 . 12/11/2010
I like this story alot so far. (:

Update soon!

MindaAnn chapter 4 . 12/10/2010
Haha! There is no problem with with one woman and six men.:)

It's fiction, we get to let our imaginations go crazy. I hope to see an new chapter up soon. Im luving it!
Sharky237 chapter 4 . 12/10/2010
Ya, she may be with six sexy men but she is still in a pretty bad place. She can't go anywhere they wouldn't find her. She will never have a life outside of the pack. Kind of a bad situation there...

Have fun with finals, I know I am...


Sharky237 chapter 3 . 12/10/2010
Yup, this is going to get very interesting.

You have some slight grammar issues. You don't use commas when they are needed, and sometimes you slip into the present tense. Other than that, this is great story so far, and we finally learned the names of the characters! Yay!


Sharky237 chapter 2 . 12/10/2010
Interesting idea about mates in a werewolf pack. I must say that I haven't heard of anyone having more than one potential mate. This should get pretty interesting...


Sharky237 chapter 1 . 12/10/2010
She jumped to that conclusion pretty quickly, didn't she? I love all of the tall, muscled men...drool... XD


christiandeath chapter 4 . 12/10/2010
I like it! Keep going!
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