|Reviews for Sacrifice|
| Eternal Skies chapter 1 . 11/11/2010
Considering the topic, your poem gently tells the story. As if, with a caring voice and a hopeful mindset, thus it doesn't give a very strong feeling of pain but of hope.
There is rhythm in certain parts, yet no ring or music to the words in general. I sort of agree with the other reviewer. Though I don't think your poem "needs" rhyming.
| oxytocin chapter 1 . 11/8/2010
This is rhythmically very exciting: the reader is compelled to keep reading to get to the end of the phrase. However, the metrical regularity makes the lack of rhyming a bit jarring. I don't necessarily like poems that rhyme, unless it is very very cleverly done, but here it seems a bit awkward that you haven't. The actual content and story behind the poem is profound and interesting, but I think veiled a little by the stanza form. Why arrange it in regular stanzas when the thought doesn't end at the end of the quatrain? It seems ordered just for order's sake.