|Reviews for naked presence|
| classic violet chapter 1 . 10/28/2010
I love the title, and the images I had while reading this poem, like an in-depth look at someones point of view combined with the seasons. love it.
| Insanity Streak chapter 1 . 10/26/2010
I like how you are saying the absence is a type of nakedness. Clever.
I'm not sure if you meant to write it like this but in the fourth stanza it says, "Summer falls, Winter springs" Are you playing with your words here? Like 'Summer falls' and 'Winter springs' in it's literal meaning and then 'Summer Fall(s), Winter Spring(s)' with the intention of listing off the seasons. Am I right? Well, that's my interpretation of it anyway.
Also, I's need to be capitalized and maybe if you put a few periods or fullstops in there it might help so the reader know where and when to pause or stop. Also, the seasons need to have capital letters, too.
This is a very creative poem. I like it. :D