|Reviews for Penumbrae|
| illusionae chapter 30 . 8/15/2012
Wait. Grace is... Eidan's SISTER? I didn't expect that at all! It's even stranger that he's betrothed to TWO of his sisters. Wow. I'm intrigued about the Dark Kingdom now because it does look like a really odd place compared to all the other kingdoms in this world. The scene with Jenna and Eidan near the end was very sweet. They're sharing a bed now! It won't be long before they finally kiss, or I hope so anyway.
| illusionae chapter 29 . 8/15/2012
I've been reading a bunch of these chapters lately and I'm so glad that there is more romance between Eidan and Jenna! I like how slow their relationship is because it makes it more fun to read when they start to get closer and it's also more realistic. :)
| levisama chapter 44 . 8/15/2012
I've finally caught up with this story now! It was great to read about Mana and Zeph for once and this was a great chapter to develop them as characters. I like how even though Zeph is a criminal, he still has responsible views when it comes to Mana. He doesn't care about himself but he cares about her. I also liked the flashback with Ophelia. It's a bit sad to see how much has changed between all the Gods because it looked like they were all nice friends before Caelum kidnapped Celeste. Their story is very tragic and I hope they resolve their hatred in the end. Update soon please! :)
| Vernelley chapter 44 . 8/14/2012
Aaaand once again I cannot sign in. Why.
Haha Zeph is so great with names. CALL UPON THE MIGHTY EARTH GODDESS O-SOMETHING. XD
I'm still not really sure exactly what's going to happen with the Earth and Air Kingdoms colliding, but it sounds pretty catastrophic... I suppose a lot depends on which course of action Mana chooses to take. It's not an easy decision to do the morally right thing when one of the parties involved has basically hated you since you were born.
Oho so maybe since Zeph died he isn't cursed anymore and it was just his sickness that Celeste got rid of that night? At least, that's how I read it. But it's kind of an amusing irony that Zeph did die and he has no idea XD I can actually really imagine how Ophelia must be feeling though. I would be angry too if I spent thousands of years trying to help my best friend only for someone who used to be my friend but whom I now hate to heal them with relative ease. And that flashback was quite painful as well, when you see what's become of Ophelia and Celeste's friendship. Especially considering Ophelia basically wanted to rip Celeste apart not long ago.
Woohoo Zeph and Mana are having a lovers' spat /coughcough And lol at Zeph perving on Mana's legs. Wtheck Zeph. Okay but seriously, they're both making strong points about why they should or shouldn't help...
It's nice to see that even though Zeph was at some point a criminal, he still obviously has moral standards, in that he's aware that two kingdoms will die if Mana doesn't help, so I think it's good that he's trying to encourage her to help them. Also, he obviously cares about what could become of Mana if she just allowed everyone to die because she's overcome with her hatred for the Earth Kingdom.
But then I did expect Mana to eventually listen to Zeph's voice of reasoning; it would be unlike her to hold that grudge against them just because of a few of the inhabitants of the Earth were selfish creatures. It's good that she can understand that, and I think this chapter shows more of both Zeph and Mana's psychological processes than we've seen up until this point.
And uhuhuhu Ophelia and Aphyron's relationship is just really precious and I hope that things will be sorted out and that everyone has a happy ending. But obviously knowing you it's not going to be that simple e_e
| findings chapter 44 . 8/14/2012
Mana and Zeph are so innocent when they don't argue! But they could've at least hugged, that would've touched my heart3
Your writings' amazing, love ya!
| thenutrunningthenuthouse chapter 44 . 8/14/2012
I like Mana’s attitude; finally there’s someone who’s just plain “screw this” I mean Eidan almost has that mentality, but I like the way Mana executes it
Oh, and I still love Zeph. Not remembering names is just another one of my favorite things about him.
Wait, if they could cure the curse…then Zeph wouldn’t have to die! :D I want their curse cured.
You know, it’s funny how you’ve been serving us pieces of the gods’ backstory and I’ve only been paying so much attention (enough, but I, unfortunately, do not remember it all). But, I love where it’s going and now that I’m remembering what I read god knows how far back, it’s all so fascinating. The gods’ story really is epic—forbidden love, murder, revenge, the lot of it. It’s so cool that all our godly friends are on the earth…
One question…why haven’t we heard from Aphyron yet? I want to see him too.
Zeph already died? *looks back at story * THERE WERE SO MANY TIMES WHEN THAT COULD’VE BEEN.
I gotta say, Zeph having the stronger morals right now is kind of freaky. I mean, Mana’s considering killing two populations, which seems kind of strange for her, but Zeph trying to prevent that? What happened to the selfish bastard I know and love?
Wow, I’m really liking this chapter. Zeph comforting Mana was so cute. It’s obvious that Zeph is complicated, and part of that includes not knowing how to charm the ladies.
*raises hand * I am indeed confused about the curse! But, I’ll wait until the next chapter. Ah man, I’m so glad that I’m reading this story. So happy.
| levisama chapter 43 . 8/14/2012
It was painful to read Lucan and Jenna fighting because I really didn't expect them to be so hostile with each other. It was also such a shock to see Lucan get violent when he saw Eidan but it's not OOC. It makes sense for him to be very angry especially when his mother and his sister died in one day. I do think that they died because of Eidan and Jenna being in Marniolle though. It's too much of a coincidence and I wonder if Ethel might have something to do with it? I can't imagine anyone else who would be suspicious...
| levisama chapter 42 . 8/14/2012
Wow, such a cliffhanger! I can see why you were excited on writing this part of this story because it looks like it has a lot of action in it. It was lovely to see Grace and Eidan finally having a sibling relationship in this story. I thought it was very sweet of Eidan to visit Marniolle just for his sister and 'm glad that he has this side to him. Sometimes, it's like he's only caring towards Jenna so I was very pleased to see him treat Grace like that. Although it does make it sadder that he has to kill her. :(
| CieloRayn chapter 37 . 8/14/2012
I love how Jenna faces her fears and comes to the realization that she is in love with Eidan ).
| B.R. McNair chapter 1 . 8/12/2012
Before I go into review mode, I just need to say this. Your opening paragraph is the complete opposite of the one for my story. Fun fact.
Okay... Well, I can't say I've read many stories in which the main characters die in the prologue. I can only hope they somehow survive. I suppose I'll have to read the whole book to find out though. You have a very effective hook in that regard. In some ways though the reader might get all pissy and not want to read the rest if the characters just die at the end. But I'm not that reader. I enjoyed this chapter and I especially liked your opening sentences. It was also slightly humorous to watch the two leads almost get into a fight right before death, which I felt actually demonstrated the power of their bond. I'll probably read and review more once I steel myself for the 200,000 words I'll have to go through. Good job on this prologue though.
Peace and love,
P.S.- I saw you at the Roadhouse. If you return reviews, I'd appreciate a review for Trials of the Son. :)
| Nesasio chapter 3 . 8/12/2012
It's been ages since I read this so I apologize if I say anything particularly stupid about stuff that was mentioned in the first couple chapters. :)
Really interested in Eidan as a character. Obviously he has that mystery of his backstory to make him even more intriguing, but he seems like a strong character in addition to that. I remember when I read this before that I thought Jenna was a bit childish but I think it's cool how Eidan doesn't seem to be. Even in the flashback, you showed their contrasting personalities well. I got a good laugh out of how nonplussed Jenna was at finding a seemingly dead boy in the middle of the forest. She'll be a formidable character someday, I think, when she grows up with whatever you throw at her in this story, and the two of them will be a good power couple/partnership. At least I think that's where this is leading, haha. I need to get further into this story sometime.
Let's see. As I'm thinking about this chapter again I'm torn how I feel about the content. On one hand I think the flashback and 'dream' sequences were both really cool, but on the other the fact that there were two in one chapter was a little odd to me. It's usually best to space out things like that unless you plan on making a habit of jumping around in the timeline. It didn't bother me as I was reading this but thinking back on it I think it might be a little excessive. Just my opinion, though.
Anyway, thanks for the review on my story. It was nice to get back here. I keep meaning to because I remember being really drawn in by the prologue, so maybe I'll stop by again soon. :)
| Highway Unicorn chapter 2 . 8/11/2012
*Reviews as she reads*
O, flash back time!
I like Jenna's character, she seems spoiled and naive, but in a good way. It promises a good character development.
Ohhh, Jenna and Eidan are too cute together. :3 I love how you write out her mixed emotions towards him, and how awkward it gets.
Ah, Eidan needs to take Jenna away on a white horse so she doesn't have to marry some stranger. It's sad, really, since that was how it was hundreds of years ago. Poor young girls had to marry some guy they didn't know... :(
Anyways, I liked this chapter. It was cute and it really showed what type of human beings Jenna and Eidan are. :)
| Highway Unicorn chapter 1 . 8/11/2012
I love the little poem at the beginning; it truly set the tone of pain and sorrow. And it was nicely written!
The two main characters were gave me a powerful impact. First, I really love how you described the hate of the citizens towards the female. She, obviously, was some form of ruler, princess most likely, and now, because of something she did, their basking love turned into dreadful hate.
Second, I felt all warm and fuzzy when the male held her hand. It was super cute XD even though...they're going to die and stuff...
Which was a shocker at the end. I think it's rather a bold AND creative move to kill off the main characters right at the get-go. Or maybe they don't die? Maybe their saved and they live happily ever after together? Yes? No?...maybe I should just head on to chapter two! :D
Anyways, I really like this story and where it's going! :)
| levisama chapter 41 . 8/11/2012
I've nearly caught up to this story and it makes me sad that I'll have to wait for new chapters soon. This was a fun chapter to read because Jenna is being Jenna as usual. Even though it's obvious that she's matured and learnt from her experience in this story, she's still childish. Caelum and Celeste would be agood couple if only Caelum stopped holding grudges against her. He obviously cares because he saved her from Mana but he's just too stubborn to admit it. :(
| illusionae chapter 18 . 8/11/2012
I loved the second part of this story! Zeph was a good addition to the cast and I'm glad to see that we'll be seeing more of him. I predict that his friend Mana will also join the main cast and that him and her might end up together. It would be nice to see Zeph being all romantic and nice for once! I like Caelum because he's the complete opposite of Eidan and he's cool. I'm not sure about Celeste yet but she looks like she's kind and pretty much just your typical nice/perfect angel. And lastly I think I prefer Zeph!