|Reviews for Tempting Fate|
| Classy Broad chapter 1 . 5/26/2011
Whoa, Fantastic Racism already? (Sorry for the TvTropes reference, couldn't help myself) Pretty fast but then again that pretty much established right away that the character's an outcast...
Last bit of nitpick I'll give is your characters' dialogue, especially near the ending, that was too much dialogue and sounds unbelievable that both of them would try to sermon each other like that in a middle of a fight.
Hmm lots and lots of gore, not that I mind, just that I feel that the action parts seem to be pretty mild, I mean there's lots and lots of blood and what I'm getting at the character's hits were about as light as a feather.,, then again she is using magic, but still...
Anyways, the 1st chapter seems to be promising, though I can't really tell what the plot is going to head; Ummm the summary doesn't seem to help too, so I think you need to write a better one to attract more readers since I don't think many readers would be attracted by the summary of the chapters instead of the story proper.
| Leafarrow chapter 4 . 2/3/2011
What I enjoyed most in this chapter was the dwaven song ;)
Hope and good wishes for the next chapters/
| Leafarrow chapter 3 . 2/3/2011
I'm so sorry for not reading this earlier. My apologies.
The story is fantastic. So I'll hurry along to the next chapter before I perish due to unbearable curiosity :D
| Leafarrow chapter 2 . 12/26/2010
This chapter made me excited :D
Not only was there a good battle, but more magic! YAY! (I love magic)
You've also made me wonder if Lyweth's adventure is going to end...
This is all a longer term for: Awesomely Written
| Leafarrow chapter 1 . 10/27/2010
I like this story, and the idea of half-breeds is fantastic!
If you write I'll read, so keep on writin.
Best wishes from the Leafarrow