Reviews for Hazel Gaze
skersey chapter 1 . 4/21/2011
"Two birds of a feather" I love that line, because the two of you are so close that you share a feather so that you are as one bird. Cool concept. I also like the part when you say her glance speaks to your heart, like two unrelated, abstract senses are able to have an effect on each other. That's really powerful. My suggestion to you would be to eliminate a rnyme...the one with "I've lost because I didn't even start, now I'm gonna follow my heart." I think it's a little cliche. However, the one I mentioned before with the glance and the heart is effective and poetic. I also like how it's a gaze as opposed to eyes or a stare Yay!
Lilja Ruusu chapter 1 . 10/27/2010
Its' so cute! :D