|Reviews for Tomorrow's Visitor|
| NormaJean Beausoleil chapter 1 . 8/5/2012
cute cute story. thanks for sharing!
| numnuts chapter 1 . 3/3/2012
Totally adorable and awesome, loved the names.. ;) Tom Waits, eh? I love Tom Waits, haha.
| Arushi chapter 1 . 2/28/2012
Okay, LOVED it!
I think the most striking thing for me was the painting Tomorrow does in the end: Idiot.
Soren seems to have ADD, but then he would, to survive everything he has, and Tomorrow's.. the typical eccentric, reclusive artist, yet not. Its a pretty good story too :)
| prostock69 chapter 1 . 10/23/2011
This was lovely :)
| clumsysurgeon chapter 1 . 8/23/2011
Holy Moley I think I just found me a favorite story on here. Great job, I really enjoyed how the dialogue was the biggest portion of the story. I usually hate when stories don't have dividers with different scenes but for some reason I loved that this one didn't, and it even helped me to focus more on what was going on than without. I think the length was perfect and despite seriousness I liked how the mood was fun and light throughout.
| i-wish-i-had-wings chapter 1 . 8/5/2011
lol, i loved tomorrow xD he's comments were just great! i never would of guessed soren was an escort or had drug-dealers after him, that was a surprise p i really liked that he painted himself into the self-portarait, it was just how he did IRL )
| Gerald chapter 1 . 4/22/2011
Hello. I very much enjoyed this. I don't generally review but I thought I must. I read the other reviews and some angered me.
I believe you were criticised for underdeveloping characters, which I don't get. When something is from someone's POV, other characters are only as strong as the effect they have on the main character. Reynolds is there- that is really all that I would expect Tomorrow to register. As for the reviewer who criticised you for not making their romance believable, I heartily disagree with them. It was refreshing not to have all this self-reflection and analysing ones self that is so common recently. There is also a marked difference between saying 'go away' and actually caring.
I suppose they wished to make this more emotive, but I suspect I loved it for not being so.
I was vaguely reminded of Sherlock Holmes- but that stems from my obsession, the mention of a shoulder injury, the connected sibling, vague sociopathic ..vibe.., and y'know.. Crime. *cough*
I feel egocentric starting (all?) my sentences with I.
| KoeSkriver chapter 1 . 1/10/2011
A sweet story. I like the swift pacing and Tomorrow's snark. Thanks!
| Erisah Mae chapter 1 . 1/3/2011
Okay, I wanted to like this story. I liked the characters. I liked the idea. But the relationship had no chemistry in it whatsoever. I mean, it consisted of one character spending 90 per cent of his time telling the other to essentially get lost, without any described byplay that would indicate that he didn't really mean it. I mean, there was no description of Tomorrow thinking that he actually was lonely, or thought there was any attractive qualities in Soren whatsoever. Like, he didn't even indicate that he wouldn't mind keeping someone who could bake around or anything, which would have been one of the easiest segues to start. When Soren said that Tomorrow would have thrown him out if he meant it, I couldn't help but think that Tomorrow had just spent the last 24hours repeatedly telling him to get lost... not exactly suggestive of the fact that Tomorrow is in fact letting Soren stay.
I mean, on the one hand, Tomorrow does get Soren some clothes. And then proceeds to help him out by calling Love plus Reynolds, (who appears to be a placeholder rather than a character). And then for some reason is chosen to be the most convenient person to do the handover. Without any sort of protest from Soren. Or talking about it. Or his sister thinking that maybe this is a bad idea. You know, with the whole risking of one's life for a person you've known for a week thing.
Yeah, I wanted to be convinced by this. I even think you're a pretty decent writer. But the romance part just wasn't convincing.
| Krowhop chapter 1 . 12/15/2010
I enjoyed this story. You are right, it really isn't a 'short', but it is a good oneshot. Made me smile, it was sweet.
| lost in pale blue chapter 1 . 12/1/2010
Soren is awesome :D I love how he just wears Tomorrow down.
| Averick chapter 1 . 11/26/2010
Hehe excellent job! Love it!
| Wicked Neko chapter 1 . 11/18/2010
Aw! No more? D:
I really liked Tomorrow... and Soren... so cute...
| Uncle Rupert chapter 1 . 11/17/2010
this is so funny. i loved this line - "He kicked me out when I fifteen."
"Really? How exactly?" - very funny.
and this - "You're not a guest, you're a trespasser." - had me giggling too. good story
| sern chapter 1 . 11/14/2010
tomorrow is probably my new favorite person ever, and this story is pretty damn amazing.