|Reviews for Start Where We Left Off|
| MaAgEc chapter 1 . 11/5/2010
Yayy :) Parents end up back together.
| Kit.Roscoe chapter 1 . 10/31/2010
I didn't notice too many glaring grammar mistakes... but you should perhaps try using commas in quotations and less CAPITALS. NO ONE SPEAKS LIKE THIS. Unless they scream a lot... but that's a different story all together.
Now, onto your story...
No offense to you, but for being high school graduates at their 5th reunion, your characters are quite immature. The way you portrayed your MC led me to have no sympathy for her at all. She breaks up with Eli because of her own insecurities, but still gets pissed off at him for not caring about her daughter... Hello? You ditched him lady, what do you expect? Above that, she lies to Don about Danae and only confesses after she catches him cheating on her... I really don't like cheaters, but liars are up on that list too. Gr... Another thing that irks me is that Eli admits that he "had never known that that was what she had wanted, or needed", but then they just suddenly announce their engagement? I personally think it's kind of ridiculous. Maybe try dating first and get to know each other again before you make that big leap. Gah...
Overall, it was a good effort. I'll be looking forward to seeing more from you!
PS. Sorry if this was long. I tend to rant :D