|Reviews for Insomnia as a Metaphor for Weak Coffee|
| simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 11/28/2010
Review marathon this weekend! (link in my profile)
The title was a bit misleading because I expected the piece to be an extended metaphor about insomnia and coffee, but I did like the piece anyway.
Your descriptions are all really beautiful and together they create an interesting picture of this person's inability to sleep. It's also something I can completely relate to.
The only one line that I didn't really like was "Naked as a lamp post where the bulb flickers incessantly with a sharp hiss." I didn't get how a lamp post would be naked? It just seemed like on odd comparison to me. Still a really wonderful piece!
| iamnolongerusingthisaccount chapter 1 . 11/1/2010
This is nice. I like the line "Naked as a lamp post where the bulb flickers with a sharp hiss." Great poem. Looking forward to more.