|Reviews for What occupies my mind|
| Who-Says-I-Can't-Use-A-Skillet chapter 2 . 11/9/2010
Hello my darling, lovely, best friend!
Well, to start off with, I like this very, very, very much. But you have some grammatical issues (I berate you about this in real life, so you should be used to it) and I think you should consider making chapters longer, around the 2,0 word mark. Why? Because I said so, that's why.
Apart from that, super good idea. Write what you know and all that, aye what (said with a ye olde English accent, of course). WHAT YOU WILL DO IS SEND ME FUTURE CHAPTERS TO EDIT. WILL YOU DO THAT?
Yes, the answer is always yes.
Also going to go and fix your little nitpicky mistakes in these here chapters already. Also, think about chapter titles. I know you can do it.
Your lovely super-mega-awesome-foxy-hot number ONE fan.
| Tootapanga1 chapter 2 . 11/8/2010
haha this is great keep writing
| Tootapanga1 chapter 1 . 11/2/2010
this is cute, i hope abbey talks to him. :D