Reviews for Cinderella vs Prince Charming
jaymar padua chapter 1 . 12/9/2012
hi ilove you
AJ Garcia chapter 4 . 3/18/2012
Wow... Language, Val, language!

Hehe, she left her shoe! How cute!
AJ Garcia chapter 1 . 3/17/2012
Oh, I like where this is going, even though I don't really get what is going on)
Lune chapter 20 . 12/3/2011
While, you have a penchant for witty dialogue that moves the plot around nicely, your plot itself is simply begging to be fleshed out. Characterization, description, use of scenery and mood-they would all add such significant life and breadth to your story that it seems a crime to leave it without.

Already your story is pleasant and engaging with its playful quips and well characterized dialogue, but it reads more like script than story and lacks the full impact of its glory because of it.

Perhaps consider re-writing this? With patience and editing I can see this actually being published as a teen novel and being rather successful.
Krystal Rock chapter 41 . 9/27/2011
You know, I should be utterly and flippin' mad at you, but since you slready started the second book im not,
Krystal Rock chapter 38 . 9/26/2011
'So is punching you, you turn all sorts of interesting colours"

That was by far the funniest thing i've heard in this book.

We'll I gotta go do homework. 'Till tomorrow-

Krystal Rock chapter 31 . 9/26/2011
Watched with confusion by Erramun and interest by Lyel. HA!
Krystal Rock chapter 30 . 9/26/2011
Krystal Rock chapter 24 . 9/26/2011
"Who died and made you king?"

I think he took it literally!

More like a Road Runner...meep meep!
Krystal Rock chapter 23 . 9/26/2011
The prince laughed. "Of course I have a license. I'm not an idiot."

"I beg to differ."
Krystal Rock chapter 20 . 9/26/2011
Krystal Rock chapter 19 . 9/26/2011
"Do you lack the vocabulary to say anything else?"

Krystal Rock chapter 18 . 9/26/2011
That caused her to make a face. ) Funny!
Krystal Rock chapter 17 . 9/26/2011
Val nodded sharply though she wore a small smile. "I have two little sisters. Fresh baked cookies are a great bribe to kids their ages."

You know, this is very important triva for older sisters. I would pay attention. )
Krystal Rock chapter 16 . 9/26/2011
That one guy that said: "So our duties are the same as ever." is funny!

And let me tell you, that is utterly hilarious.
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