Reviews for Year of the Wolf |
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![]() ![]() ![]() i look forward to see how each girl's life proceeds. good character development you kept my interest with a good plot |
![]() ![]() ![]() O I am so not shocked that Angle went to be Alpha! Haha, maybe Selene would be abetter choice...though I dont really know Angles strenghts that well...ANYWAYS I want more! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Ahh...Wow. I really like this story you got here! Hope to see more! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Teehee, rules are always good! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Another great chapter. I hope you update soon! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Aw, that's really sad! By the way, I love the name Tristen. I'm using it (except it's written "Tristan") for another story I've been writing. One suggestion - be careful of comma splices. They're a tad overused in this chapter. It's still very interesting, nevertheless. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I like it keep writing :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() This is really interesting already. I like how there are established rules. I would caution you to make sure your pronouns agree: "If an Alpha steps down and hands over their leadership prematurely, they themselves forfeit their right to rule, but their children are still in the running" should be "If an Alpha steps down and hands over HIS leadership prematurely, HE HIMSELF forfeits HIS right to rule, but HIS children are still in the running" (or of course you could write "her" instead). Other than that, however, this is good. I'm excited to start the action story. |