The plot is good and has the potential to be great. It was very rushed. We need more time with the background of the characters. Work on character development. There were a lot of time where I thought "well why did he react this way and not that way?" For example the scene when TJ asking to live with Gabe wasn't really realistic. TJ at that point still felt like he needed Dmitri and the way that Gabe hesitated on letting live there was weird, he previously said that he'd follow him around so that he wasn't alone. Wouldn't living with him be perfect?

Overall the idea is really good just work on it more!

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was that the end ?

i hope it wasnt despite the fact it s been hella depressing i like it

Can someone please kill Dmitri now? He so deserves it already!

Well, hopefully Gabriel just learned to be less blunt. Good update!

This story's really well written, although the first chapter was completely confusing. I hope TJ returns to therapy and that it helps him. Gabriel seems cool :P

Very well-written!