Reviews for Forbidden Love
natmarie chapter 1 . 1/16/2011
Interesting could go a few different ways. I like the short chapters they are easy to read. Try reading this out loud, some parts seem like the periods come too soon, or others are really long and could be broken up. A little more detail would be nice as well. But good start.

PS. Thanks for favoriting my one shot :) Hope you like whatever else you decide to read
Brown-Eyed Chocoholic chapter 1 . 11/6/2010

:D Can't wait to read the 2nd chapter!