Reviews for Allied Rivals
Night Skye Tears chapter 1 . 1/11/2014
the last line is lovely. i would just suggest some punctuation.
Loss of Words chapter 1 . 11/17/2010
Definitely enjoyed this poem. :)

Question, what do you mean by "breaking the tone" in the second line?
HeroofEnelios chapter 1 . 11/15/2010
This is quite well written and eye-catching. I really like the last few lines of this poem, and I think you're quite a good poet. Great job and keep on going!


thanks for the comment!
Alexander Emberson chapter 1 . 11/7/2010
Well written. I enjoyed the use of poetic devices. This was my favorite line "Dispersing incandescent beams throughout the earth." Nicely done.