|Reviews for Shades of Gray|
| Emma chapter 41 . 5/29/2013
I have no constructiv critisism to give, but I absolutley love your story :)
| nickiandlogan chapter 41 . 9/18/2012
| jeanne smith chapter 41 . 1/8/2012
Okay. I have just read your story...in three hours.
I don't usually review, I rather lurk around and just read. But after this, I just had to. You know, I really did. I read the reviews, and well, darling: I think you're more than under-appreciated.
So, be prepared, cause this is gonna be one helluva long review compared to those other teenybopper generic reviews that - as far as I know are appreciated, but do not satisfy.
Let me start off with, darling, I love the little paragraph at the beginning of each chapter. It is a unique way to start off each chapter and show the reader what to expect when they read the next few paragraphs, yet not exactly fully telling what is gonna happen. I was always very excited for the next chapter and read that paragraph and get on with the story. Also another interesting thing is that you get to see how the characters think without making it annoying.
One thing I have to admit- unless it is a mind blowing masterpiece, of course - is that changing from first to third person is annoying. Changing point of views aaaaaaaaall the time is annoying, period. The only book I could tolerate with that is Shiver by Maggie Stiefvater. Other than that, most have pathetically failed and only looked stupid.
Next up, I'mma be pointing out some criticism, 'kay.
What I didn't like is that some points brought up were not explored. I was really curious as to when Aiden would open up to Kase and tell her about his past. But I guess that didn't happen. Kasey also didn't mention the fact that she was bullied in high school either.
You have to be able to find a balance between being a total sentimental sap and being someone who knows how to remember to tell their significant other certain milestones in their life and truthfully so.
It won't bore the readers, it'll make us like the characters more, it shows us that the characters aren't one dimensional, or two. It makes the characters more real, more relatable to, and more lovable.
Not saying that your characters weren't lovable, they so are. Aaaah~
Aiden was actually just a little softie under that tough. And Kasey could have shown a little more spunk here and dar, but still.
Aaaaand, I'm not done yet. I liked the character relationships. How it wasn't always, "Aiden and Kasey sitting in a tree, K-I-S-S-I-N-G."
Only god knows my vehement disgust to those stories that went couple this, kissing there, back to couple this and couple that. Darling, I loved the drama with Cam. Hahaha, call me a sadist. But it added some spice to the story, that, most often is as typical as finding snow in a tropical country. Very typical, don't you think?
Though, as much as I like having the lives of other characters in a story and not just a set of two individuals, I love fluff. I love fluff so much. FLUFF. This pacified my fluff craving for until the next story I read.
I practically danced with glee when Aiden finally said I love you. The second reaction was, took you long enough for that, dork.
Personally, I didn't mind the chapter lengths, because each chapter was satisfying. But, I see that many others had wanted you to put together chapters but that defeats the purpose of having the highlight of each chapter. I liked how there were close to no filler chapters, and each had it's own significant happenings.
Durr, I'm sleepy. But I'm not done yet.
So, one thing is you better get to work on that sequel because I'mma be waiting.
I enjoyed reading this a lot. It's not perfect, but it has that charm. I could almost believe- that with how you wrote them 'gods- that they were real. I will give you kudos on where you deserve them, you are a writer with potential, go use it.
Go do that sequel, I will die if those questions are left unanswered. /3
| R. Ficst chapter 41 . 11/9/2011
Loved the story! Fun characters and good writing and pacing.
I think you can tone your rating down from M to T, though. I can't remember anything violent or sexual being explicit or descriptive enough to warrant M.
Good work, I really enjoyed it start to finish. Hope you plan on writing more!
| violet-eyez chapter 41 . 11/8/2011
aww the end i will miss this story
| buttercup123 chapter 41 . 11/5/2011
your story is pretty good, I liked it! I would just recommend that you combine some chapters together to make them longer because individually they come off as really short. Other than that, you're a pretty good writer, and I can't wait to see what else you have in store. :)
| Aurora B chapter 41 . 11/5/2011
I LOVED/ LOVE this story.
And I especially like the different facets in character of both Aiden and Kasey.
The wedding was a good ending for the story - even though there are a few things left open. However, I'm glad that you didn't prolong the story for all it was worth.
What Zeus did was unfair but I'm happy there was a way without too much drama.
I'm looking forward to the other parts of the series.
| 1122 chapter 1 . 10/27/2011
awe and wonder
| Aurora B chapter 38 . 10/17/2011
I really like your story. I stayed awake almost all night to read the chapters.
I love Aiden and Kasey. They are both stubborn and proud but also nice and sweet to one another. Though, both have issues they have to overcome - and fast.
And if it was possible for someone like Meg in Disneys Hercules Kasey will easily pass the test.
Please update soon.
| Aurora B chapter 7 . 10/17/2011
There you wished to befriend a MMA fighter yourself - who needs a knight in shining armor anyway?
And Aiden is so cute - now he only needs to man up and admit his feelings.
| Aurora B chapter 6 . 10/17/2011
Aiden's ex was evil. Leopard print? In his refuge? Poor guy.
And I like the "man-talk": After they talked about feelings they have to fight (or in this case: Aiden) to prove their manhood.
| Aurora B chapter 4 . 10/17/2011
I like this chapter. Don't worry about the story. It's great.
However, guys like Cameron are just annoying. Not interested means not interested. It doesn't change just because he was always 'such a good friend'.
| Aurora B chapter 2 . 10/17/2011
Never underestimate a woman. One question and the big bad fighter was hooked.
| violet-eyez chapter 38 . 9/11/2011
aww so is this story almost finished?
| violet-eyez chapter 37 . 8/27/2011
aww almost finished