Cute ! ️

This is absolutely adorable! And I love the ending for some reason, the whole 'legitimate excuse' part, it made me giggle a little :p
For an original fiction oneshot(my first, huh) I really liked this. I always read multi chapter fics, so its a change.

I loved this little story! Keep up the great work!

Amazing. The characters were insanely realistic. I loved Axel.

This story was really sweet.

Awww it's so cute! It's giving me cavities (or maybe it's just the ice cream that I'm eating right now...)
Anyways, i loved it.

Maybe it's just me, but I can't see someone not thinking about sex until senior year. Especially a guy. Hormones are everywhere by high school. Only a few escape that grouping. I like the name of this story, and the story itself. It's all cute and crap. I noticed a few grammar/whatever problems, but they were minor and still understandable. I was expecting (from the summary) that Axel would act like a faux-boyfriend until things were figured out and etc, but this is less cliche. Therefore, good one-shot and good luck writting and with life things.
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I think this is one of the better ones you’ve written. It reminds me of my own story, ‘Tenderhearted’… but enough about me.

The characters aren’t so complex, but they function for the plot. The plot is what holds this story together, and you’ve played it out quite well.

One thing I notice about your work is that you don’t frequently tap into deep wells of emotion, for the readers or the characters. Your characters come off as shallow, in this sense. I don’t mean that as a terrible thing; I’m just saying that they don’t appear to have vivid and compelling emotional lives. I suppose this is related to your consistent use of the term ‘fluff’. For example, neither Axel nor Zach really seem shaken by the events of the story. If I would characterize their emotional response, it would be ‘pleasantly surprised.’ Your characters don’t seem to have pasts or futures that are much relevant to the present.

None of this is necessarily a bad thing; I’m just pointing out the decisions you’ve made for many of your stories. It is completely possible to write compelling and powerful stories with characters who have no past and little interior life. Consider many folktales, where the protagonists seem to emerge from nowhere and their emotions are hardly much of the story.

However, I have a feeling you might be interested in trying out more psychological complexity, and no matter what direction you take your work, a little practice with that couldn’t hurt.

This was ridiculously cute, really it was, and i loved the build up between Axel and Zach, but one thing that kept bugging me was that you mispelled brunette several times through out the story. That's really the only mispelling that i kept coming across, but it was exceedingly annoying. Just saying. Besides that, it was a good read. :)

I know it's cliche to say, but this was a very sweet and cute story. :)

Good length, interesting to read, didn't see any annoying typos. Great work.

This is so sweet, and cute...and adorable and really...light, if you get what I mean.

I like the style of your writing, it's simple, interesting and, to a large extent, concise.

lol "And so was Axel" xD i have to say, i really like your style of writing )

This was cute :)

Eek! -jumps up and down- this is so cute! yay!

Keep Writing,

xxTunstall Chickxx

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ARISH THIS WAS SO CUTE And quite honestly reminded me of me in high school. Except I had no Axel then QQ

This made my night a bit better when I initially read it, which is good since I read it for that purpose :D Though I have to admit, the endings to your oneshots are starting to get predictable... kekeke

What, did you hear something? You claim I said that out loud? HMMPH.

You should is write more stuff. Coughwritemechristmasficcough kekeke (crickets and silence, idk what you're talking about). But keep writing because you write god...ly? I'll let you decide whether I meant godly or goodly, kekeke.

...DONT SAY IT. Or I will make you feed your elephant.

...I feel sorry to any other person who reads this. They must think I'm some random reviewer off my rocker...

LOVE YOUR OPPAR.

...LOVE, YOUR OPPAR.

Not exactly life-saving here, but commas are indeed important :D