This story is great.

But I think it would have been better if the perspectives were not Maggie's and Blake's. Perhaps if it was just Maggie's, or just Blake's or even third person, it would make the ending a whole lot less expected.

In fact, I already know the ending. Maggie and Blake get back together again. They have to. Because it's written in Maggie's point of view and Blake's point of view. If Maggie went with Luke and Blake went with some other chick, their pov.s would be "I missed Maggie/Blake, but I'm now with _/Luke" - and that would be very pointless.

Because you have used these two particular pov.s the ending is very expected.

Other than that, it's pretty good.

Chapters 8-10 are good, but it would be better if you could make them a bit longer. Try and describe more of Blake and Maggie's surroundings and what they're feelings are.

This is a realy good story, I can't believe more people haven't reviewed!

Your descriptions are very clear and easy to picture. I also like how you change between Maggie's P.O.V and either Blake's or Luke's for each chapter.

Keep up the good work :)