Ack, Cliffhanger. I don't know if you're planning on continuing this story, but what you have so far is fantastic. Just thought I'd let you know.

Oh wow! Nice cliffy! Ha

Aww... too bad this story is suspended. I was liking the pace so far. The story bores me a tiny bit (well maybe my fault for reading all 7 chapters in one night), but I'm just not letting go. For a sci-fi movie, it is easy to follow, and the characters are presented well. Over all, I'm giving it 7.5/10. :)

Ah, the suspense! I really hope you update this soon because I'm dying to know more about "Mr. Strong and Silent". I'm also dying to know more about what happens in general. Very good job at painting a very creepy setting for some crazy, nonsensical stuff to go down. The whole thing about Bunnings definitely gave me a little start.

Every story of yours that I read, I love more than the last one.

Oh my goodness, you're back! I look forward to following your work once more :)

You have no idea how FREAKIN' excited I am to see another story of yours posted. I just so happened to check up on your author pages and saw THIS! I am loving it so much so far and, hoo boy... what a cliffhanger ending to this chapter. You are absolutely awesome at coming up with engaging fantasy/sci-fi stories and I have definitely enjoyed reading all the ones you've written so far. I still have the copy of Gladys the Guard you sent me, and I re-read it every so often because I love it!

I have noticed a few spelling and grammar errors throughout the chapters so far, so if you're ever looking for a beta reader, let me know and I'd be happy to spellcheck for you!

So happy to see you back on FictionPress!

Also, please update soon!

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I am so happy you're back! I've adored all of your stories. Your style, the universes you're able to create, and the characters you write are amazing. This story is incredibly unique and I'm really looking forward to reading more!

Ah! Another awesome cliffhanger! I don't know if I'm more excited about finding out what the 10,0-year-old plaque or whatever it is says, or who 789 really is. My thinking on the object Hague found is that it must be the work of some Precoger from way back then who was able to see that Standard English would be the lingua franca. I'm guessing it's a warning of some sort, kind of like how scientists and anthropologists now are trying to figure out a warning for nuclear waste that would be intelligible to people hundreds of thousands of years from now. As far as 789's real identity, I have zero clue but I'm dying to find out next chapter!

Whoa..I like this story very much! You have many so any characters in this, they all have personalities and some kind of quirck. The story is very intriguing and I'm betting in a great plot. But what really drew me was the descroptions of the planet and just how rich your characters are.

I already love 789, and I like how Anna is bitter and sad(not so much it hurst to read, just enough for someone with such past)and the control it all government is a interesting idea. People in the future having the same problem we have now. We may have new shiny toys we still are just a bit more then monkeys(most of the time..eh!hahahaha).

Great story! Why you erased the other ones?

Graviola

Wow! The intrigue. I wanna know what 789 looks like and how she knows him. I knew I liked him.

I love the way that you described Carla. A bull dog and then a cat. She's not my favorite person in the story, and certainly not anyone that I would be friends with in real life (from what I have read so far) but she certainly has my respect.

Oh the Black. I was thinking there was something down there but I was guessing that if there was any writing it would be in some dead and lost language. I'm even more interested now. I wanna know what the heck it says.

Funny, when you were writing about the Black being transported back to earth I had the sudden image of the Black turning the human race into zombies. I had to smile at that considering that I don't even like zombie movies. But then you wrote about Bunning's flat lining while the arm was moving and that was kinda scary.

The story is really coming along. Still loving the imagery and your sense of writing. Cant wait for more!

Happy Writing,

Nourgelitnius

Carla has a sense of entitlement that is huge. Wow. Ugh. LOL, even when it's something that can be understandable (waiting around for Max when he knew when he was supposed to meet her) the way it comes off is so irritating, lol.

I wonder who 789 is. I don't think it's someone she knew very well since she didn't recognize his voice but his face is instantly recognizable, so I'm going to assume he's someone 'famous' or at least well known. But then again, voices do change over time AND you also alter them through your memories and connect them to emotions you feel at the time so that could also be why she didn't recognize it.

Hmm.

And if I was on an alien planet where a dead man's hand tried to follow a woman who had precognitive abilities and then I discovered a monument or something that was written in standard English although the dust above hadn't been moved in thousands of years I think I might end up quitting my job and going far, far, away. LOL.

That just screams bad things happening. And round of applause to Anna for wanting to stick around and doing her job, choosing to do it when she has an ally in the very awesome doctor who would try and help her get off planet even if that means putting his life in danger to do it.

This chapter answered a few questions I had about her powers, or just precognitive ability in general, and the whole idea is a functional precognitivist. That idea is fascinating even though when he first said it I was wondering if it meant he had the ability but to an even lesser extent than she did, like he got gut feelings that came true but he didn't actually *see* anything.

I like how you described the planet, especially the way at first you don't know that the colours were people. I thought they were rocks/minerals at first, lol, and then when you said they were marching I was like '... oh man, Anna has made the planet come alive...' hahahha.

This is definitely the lull before the storm. Things are calm, people are musing and looking at their places and BAM, something big is going to happen.

I really do like that Max is willing to look into what makes him uncomfortable about Anna instead of just putting it down to her being a criminal.

Ohmigawd! This is so nerve wrecking, I can't wait until you reveal the big mystery! I like the good ol' doc too. Really interesting thread of thought .

Couldn't wait to type it immediately, but unfortunately typing on a mobile phone out in -7 degrees with gloves on didn't work out.

Hehe, I like this kind of slow moments when people's minds can be explored once in a while. Well it does give really interesting background info about both the characters and the universe around them. Really fascinating!

Sigh, cliff hanger much?

Can't wait for more.