|Reviews for i can tell|
| this wild abyss chapter 1 . 11/21/2010
Very nice! Normally I don't like a poem where the entire thing is just one long stream without stanza breaks. In fact, I usually preach pretty strongly against it, but this poem is one of the rare exceptions where it works. I thought that it showed a really strong stream of conscious thought, and I liked how it seemed to tie in to a sequence of events. I also enjoyed your used of a 'but' to transition the reader into the alternate side of the tale, so to speak. It was very effective, and I think you did a good job showing this character's personality. All in all, a very nice poem.