And another antagonist appears. I can't wait to hear Kieron's back story and I his prophecy. I also wanna know what his face looks like, and I figure it can't really be all burned and stuff because that would be to obvious. Then I got to thinking he had the head of an animal and immediately thought of a wold head or something, but that got switched in with a squirrels and... any who since people can see his mouth I guess that was a fail idea, but I still can't wait to see how you're going to surprise us. I love how you wrote about him getting all angry because I could definitely picture it. Nice work!

woo a new villain :)

gaah it grates me everytime it's mentioned that kieron will never be able to leave the city.. THERE HAS TO BE A WAY!

and good thing for annabelle, she might come in handy. her plans i think will actually help estraya and kieron.. because estraya can calm kieron when he gets angry, plus she gets to know his secret YAY

man i wanna see under his hood.

FAVORITE. CHAPTER. EVER!

I CAN'T WAIT FOR NEXT MONDAY :)

Love your stories as usual

heh. stupid annabelle. estraya will never leave him. :)

awesome chapter!

Great chapter

I liked the story up until now, but I don't really like what's happening with Estraya.

She has the same thoughts over and over. And though it's wonderful that she's standing up for Kieron, some of her actions aren't really realistic..

But overall, good job:)

i totally love estraya. i hope annabelle doesnt go telling her dad who will tell amir. oh and what the hell was that ring kieron made for amir for? i hope it isn't for imprisoning estraya?

Waiting eagerly for the next chapter. personally i like this one best among all ur stories. ur obviously growing as a writer. I like how kieron is different from all ur other male protagonists. Just a few critiques though, if u dont mind me saying:

1)the female protagonists in ur stories most of the time seem to have pretty much the same least, thats my opinion. i could be wrong.

2)i believe u should work on finding better titles. "seared by desire", "rocked by passion" seem kinda shallow u know?

With all that said, ur obviously a talented and devoted writer. Looking fwd to reading more!

Thanks for the update. The plot is getting thicker with Annabelle (I can't help but think "what a bitch's name!", sorry to all the Annabelle of the world ...). It was a good chapter. I remember telling you that i was finding Estraya too passive. That's not true anymore. I like how she is fiery character. The only down point might be the fact that Estraya's thoughts are too numerous, or too repetive. I failed to see how it is making the story move foward, even if you surely think it is important for the reader to know her feelings... which I can't deny. Maybe you could make them lighter.

I'll stop here. I hope my critiques are useful and don't offend you in any way.

Till next week

ugh I really have to wait a whole week to find out what happens next! It's torture I tell you, torture! :-P

Thanks for the chapter, it was beautiful as usual.

ahh i have no idea what to think about kieron's face...soo excited to see it. n i hope this bitch at the end of the chapter gets her ass kicked by estraya.

i loved how kieron got all protective of her. it was soo sweet in a violent earth way lol

love the chapter!

take care. n good luck for the promotion!

Ah yes the scheming evil spoiled woman appears at last! I hope Estraya won't listen to her. Can't wait for next Monday, I bet Kieron is uber handsome. Personal opinion. See you Monday!

I think Keiron must have weird scarring on his facce, or disfiguring birthmarks. I think his facial structure is normal because of the way the story reads.

loved it! keep going!

I love this! It's as good as Lucian and Sara's story so far! People might not like it as much maybe because they liked the whole vampire element going on, which has been pretty popular lately :) But this is really really good, trust me... Oh yeah, I love the style of how you write. :D