Reviews for Empty Rhymes
simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 11/26/2010
I like the flow here. Your rhymes and formatting create a really nice flow and it doesn't seem forced at all. I did kind of expect you to stop the rhyme in the last stanza given the first line... that would've been a nice touch, but this worked well too.

I especially liked ocean and motion. That approximate rhyme was a nice mix-up with the rest of the rhymes.

I also like how you said you deserved this. It really adds a bit of depth to the narrator's character. Well done.

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