|Reviews for Falling Flowers|
| Bananas in a Blender chapter 1 . 12/22/2010
I really enjoyed your style. Your use of imagery made this poem captivating.
In one or two instances, I thought you could use some cutting:
"Sunrise presents himself with a flourish,
he paints the room with golden brushstrokes of light,"
Try taking out "of light"-I think it's unnecessary, and hinders the beautiful rhythm you have going. (You might even be able to take out "he"...but read it aloud first, see how it fits.)
Pleasure to read.
| Tapioca-Robot chapter 1 . 12/22/2010
Beautifuly written, with magical, fanciful, quaint doses of simple but powerful imagery. The idea is simple enough, but is really taken to a whole other level by presenting this event and its people vividly, adeptly, and pretty well perfectly. It's a scene of wonderful emotion and breathtaking visuals, and is made all the more amazing that so much could be shown through written word. Brilliant.
| J. J. Boucher chapter 1 . 11/30/2010
Beautiful poem. At first, I wasn't exactly sure of where this would go, but once I started to read the rest of the poem, I quickly saw the lengths of the cunning imagery. This is wonderful.
| Audrey33 chapter 1 . 11/25/2010
Can't log in at the moment; I apologise.
Nicely written. I really have nothing else to say besides that, as always, your imagery is lovely.
Have a wonderful Thanksgiving if you're in the US, and just an overall nice week if you live elsewhere.