Reviews for As If
nnocturnalme chapter 1 . 12/12/2010
Really Beautiful x
Subbie chapter 1 . 11/28/2010
this is so true...
HiddenFromYou chapter 1 . 11/27/2010
I like the layout you've got here, it feels neat and ordered while still holding the emotion needed when talking about this subject.

However, you do get a little generic towards the end. You start off with 'scribbling' and 'ripping', but end with 'trying' and 'caring', which are words used a lot. I get that they fit in, but some more unique words could have been used.

You've got a strong ending, and it holds a kind of dead finality (that's a good thing! :P).

Lastly, this line: "{can you hear the nin?}" stumped me. What did you mean by it? I have the feeling it should be really obvious, but I'm not sure. :/

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