Whoa! For once, the main character didn't die! I'm in shock! The kid in black though seems to appear whenever something bad happens, he's a little suspicious... Hm... Poor Will, though. I liked him, he was funny. I just thought Alex was gonna die for sure so I'll just guess that there's more to it. You have some minor grammar/spelling mistakes, but nothing spellcheck/grammar check and a good read-through won't fix. Good job!