Hi there,

I just happened to be poking around some profile when I came across yours. On there it said you were sure your writing was bad and that your friends convinced you to get an account. I am glad that they convinced you to share your talent with the rest of us writers. You can play your words in a way that works and has actuall meaning behind them. I have posted your poem in this review and will just make a few minor changes to this great piece of work.

We pray and care

For those who have been hurt

By this(OUR) world.

We say "don't worry

It's just (AN) improvement.

Nothing will happen"

Look,

Look now(-)

See what's happening(;)

Open your eyes

And see

What you have created.

(A PLACE) where people are controlled by fear.

Improvement, development, change(,)

It's all the same no matter what you call it.

This world was fine

The way it was.

Don't change what doesn't need to be changed.

Keep writing and sharing with the world!

to be honest, this scared me.

it's so true, in world there's so much mystery and the most people don't see.