Reviews for Going on and on
a.jonline chapter 1 . 12/11/2010
okay mate first of all as first try its amazing, your verses are 2 long like someone could get bored just keep reading without getting the point, try to make it shorter between 8 and 16 bars each verse and the same bar don't use few words on it make it longer a bit like "be nice and take this mirror that i bought, and try to see if thats you the same or not" , anyway bro u so good with the rhyme and the flow too so u doing great :)