that is so mean I thought it was a story lol :)
great work though

you should continue with the story. Is' good, is' good:D

aww...that was a very awesome half shot! :P

You've found a clever way of writing it, I just love how it could all become true!

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Aw! That was actually kinda cute. Do you plan on doing anything with it, or just leaving it as is? After all - it's got potential. )

That was funny. I liked how you built up the tension of their passion, and suddenly brought it crashing down by the damn alarm clock. You kind of turned it into a story by adding the guy from her dreams on the bus. Whatever. I thought it was amusing.