|Reviews for Bleeding Roses|
| MentalBrink chapter 1 . 1/4/2011
I had to read it a second time to find the deaper meaning, and I can relate to an extent.
btw, "Stray" sounds interesting PM me when you put it up!
| the sun softly smiles chapter 1 . 12/14/2010
Hm. I like this overall, but I *do* think that there needs to be some kind of punctuation between lines 1 & 2 of the second stanza - it's a misplaced modifier that makes it seem like the stars are stained red with scented petals, which I am fairly sure you didn't mean. Also, the transition between lines 1 & 2 of the last stanza is also kind of awkward, at least to me. I really like the ending line, however, because everything else in the poem has a vibrant crimson kind of quality ("bleeding roses", "stained red", etc); it's a great contrast.
| Poet Lordy chapter 1 . 12/14/2010
An interesting short piece, nice first stanza and a flowing 2nd too.
The world can be a tough place, she seemed to have great worries?, Was she dreaming, will we know?.
"Stained red with scented pedals"
Should this be "petals"?